For Writing we had been doing Collaborative writing for weeks, and we still managed to finish it. I went and drawed the giant and made it simple, because It's a children's book. Some of them are images, but 1 of the backgrounds is an image. We fixed all our mistakes before and I hope you enjoy it.
If it's not good enough, please just enjoy it we tried our best.
Friday, September 13, 2019
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Kia Ora i'm Olivia from Yaldhurst Model school
ReplyDeleteI liked the way at the end of the comment you said if you see big ballet shoes don't touch them or you will go extinct that was really cool how you said that did you think about trying to trace the pictures that you didn't draw.
it really helps your post if you write more bout and explaining more about it.
Why did you decide to write about that.
Kind regards Olivia 🐕🐶
LOL! this is cool!
ReplyDeleteHi im Eamon, and I am from YMS.
And I really like this blog! this story was cool, and I like how the giant beats the dinosaur up at the end! and also, the little gnome that is down in the right corner is cool to.
Did you think about using a few similes or something? that would be good! it would make your story better by a bit!
But how come you did not talk about your story at the top, if you did, We might be more tempted to read the story!
anyway Bye - Eamon
Kia Ora Mark, It's Kylie here from the same class as you. I really like how you made your story interesting and fun for others and for little kids as well and I know this story is good for kids because I showed my brothers this story and they really liked it! I think you this really good you don't need to work on anything.
ReplyDeleteGood Job!
- Kylie.